Re: New Weapons story by Mike Wilson
Posted: March 08, 2013, 03:39:36 PM
I can't say that I liked this one very much at all. Characterization is extremely weak, dialog is stilted, and all of the plot elements fit together much too neatly and culminate in a happily-ever-after kind of ending. *Insert 'puke' emoticon here.*
I did like the idea of two guys coming up with similar ideas and getting into competition, just because it's different. Most of the time, some new invention centers around a single individual. I just don't think it was handled all that well. Especially when they finally made friends; they put their dangerous toys down in a public place and just walked away from them. NOT clever of them.
Putting both characters in the same town didn't help at all, either; too convenient.
Keep trying, Mike.
I did like the idea of two guys coming up with similar ideas and getting into competition, just because it's different. Most of the time, some new invention centers around a single individual. I just don't think it was handled all that well. Especially when they finally made friends; they put their dangerous toys down in a public place and just walked away from them. NOT clever of them.
Putting both characters in the same town didn't help at all, either; too convenient.
Keep trying, Mike.