Ties That Bind by Kasidy Manisco
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Re: Ties That Bind by Kasidy Manisco
I liked this story. The main character -- the narrator -- has a busy life, protecting her friend. Her motivation seems a little stronger than the explanation for it is, but that isn't bad; it hints at credible backstory.
The fight scene was well done, but even better was the immediate aftermath, when the narrator has to overcome the temptation to be controlled by her magic, instead of being in control of it.
About the only thing that bothered me was what I felt was a use of jargon: some magical terms that I'm not familiar with. They're used as though the author simply assumes that every reader must already know them. I got the impression that they must be listed in some kind of dictionary. This wasn't a deal-breaker, though.
I liked the way the story was written; Kasidy is quite skillful with plot, character, and action. It was a smooth, fast read, sleek without drawing attention to itself. I didn't notice a single technical error.
Excellent job.
The fight scene was well done, but even better was the immediate aftermath, when the narrator has to overcome the temptation to be controlled by her magic, instead of being in control of it.
About the only thing that bothered me was what I felt was a use of jargon: some magical terms that I'm not familiar with. They're used as though the author simply assumes that every reader must already know them. I got the impression that they must be listed in some kind of dictionary. This wasn't a deal-breaker, though.
I liked the way the story was written; Kasidy is quite skillful with plot, character, and action. It was a smooth, fast read, sleek without drawing attention to itself. I didn't notice a single technical error.
Excellent job.
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