The Demon Whitefish by Jordan Moureau Story

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Re: The Demon Whitefish by Jordan Moureau Story

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Not too bad for a first-timer. Good characterization and dialog, good setting details. The resolution was a little different from what I expected, but that's good too. I liked how the nobleman was portrayed as pretty much useless, with everyone else doing his job and him getting the credit. Unfair, but it makes good story material (and reflects the real world all too well). I also liked how they treated Dierdre respectfully after they had to kill her. That's a twist I don't see used, but it goes along with the unstated portrayal of her as being driven to error by grief. Very nice touch.

I spotted a few spelling and punctuation errors, but it wasn't too bad overall.

You're off to a good start, Jordan. I look forward to reading more from you.
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