Soccer Mom by Vannessa Peterson

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Re: Soccer Mom by Vannessa Peterson

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Watch the POV. Fifth paragraph:
The woman forced her mouth into a straight line to keep from laughing while her beau scratched his head and told himself this guy couldn't be real.
You go from German's POV to that of the customer.

The whole thing profoundly confused me when:
"Lemme show you all the space in the back," said German as he started sliding the door open.
There's more head-hopping, starting with Brandon reading Rhonda's unspoken thought. Then the whole remainder of the story suggests a Rosemary's Baby scenario, with no connection to the car-shopping episode. It's almost like parts of two unrelated stories.
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