That Damned Toothbrush...by Ioana Visan

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Re: That Damned Toothbrush...by Ioana Visan

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The intro worked, but prefer one that grabs my attention better. Nice description, dialogue good and all the elements needed for a short story were present. Taking home an alien would be interesting, and I’m sure swapping stories with an alien over a beer would be interesting too.

I liked the twist at the end, and the concern for the wife!

Good job
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