Re: Peachy Head by Mark Govier
Posted: April 06, 2017, 11:54:36 PM
Quite a surreal piece. Dialog, setting, characterization are pretty decent. Good mechanicals.
Plot? Suicide as an institutionalized spectator sport; couple friends go to see some, but all they did was watch. No conflict, no antagonist, no character arc. No reason for me to care about the characters.
Try harder, Mark. Make me care. I think this concept has good potential; I'd like to see it developed. Try to really surprise me.
Plot? Suicide as an institutionalized spectator sport; couple friends go to see some, but all they did was watch. No conflict, no antagonist, no character arc. No reason for me to care about the characters.
Try harder, Mark. Make me care. I think this concept has good potential; I'd like to see it developed. Try to really surprise me.