- Lester Curtis
- Long Fiction Editor
- Posts: 2734
- Joined: January 11, 2010, 12:03:56 AM
- Location: by the time you read this, I'll be somewhere else
There. Now that I've got that out of the way, one little quibble: The PoV changes were a little rough. It might have been better if you stayed in one character's head the whole time.
Good job with characterization and dialog. Setting ... glad I don't live there. Plot--umm, partial? Lots of the backstory is missing, but that doesn't hurt the story.
Fun ride; thanks!