The intro got my attention, and the story held it until the end. I like the writing in this one. I love the smile: This apparition glided past like a submarine periscope cutting through sea. I used twin periscopes in a story once depicting an alligator patroling the everglades.
As the story unfolded, it was easy to follow and at no time did I have to ponder the actions of the characters to understand the story. Good!
Good story with good writing techniques----this is a story to study!