Children and Fools by Iain Stark

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Megawatts
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Children and Fools by Iain Stark

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The story gets my attention in the first sentence. Nice use of words like–--Darra’s voice chimes with pleasure!

Darra must be a witch or demon that lives off the life of others. With the reference to ‘inhale’ and ‘cool breath,’ I was reminded of the ‘Steam’ in Stephen King’s novel Doctor Who.

I liked the dialogue which sounded natural.

Nice job.
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