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Vila
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The March 2022 issue is now live!

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Let us know how we're doing and give the writers some feedback on their work! Without your comments, they won't know what they got right and what they need to improve upon. It's important that you give them feedback.

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Tears For The Gifted by S. A. Locket

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Nice intro. We are introduced to superhuman powers of old such a magic. The Gifted ones can create havoc in this world, and at birth often kill their parent. Ben the most powerful of the Gifted, seems to appoint himself as the overseer of these Gifted Children and manages them the best he can. Ben killed the last Gifted one he encounters for she had a deadly disease that spreads to everyone, apparently.

The writer used good techniques and developed the story until the end.

Nice job.
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Embracing Eternity by Charles E.J. Moulton

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Poignant intro that makes one feel as if they were there on the couch with her.

Susie’s thoughts and feeling, and her remembrance of the past filled the story for beginning to end. Grief is a hard emotion to overcome, and in Susie’s case she managed to live though it and get a second chance at life again.

This story was told with compassion in which most of us can identify with. The ending was fitting and helped resolve Susie’s grief.


One possible mistake: Mel Torme sang “‘Chestnuts’ Roasting on an Open Fire.” It is very easy to make that type of mistake because there is a song “Chipmunks Roasting on an Open Fire” which is a take-off from “Chestnuts Roasting on an open fire.” The author might have purposely referred to Chipmunks because a question mark was use after Torme, which would indicate doubt.

Good description and good word choice in this story.


Nice job.
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