The Fixer by Damir Salkovic

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The Fixer by Damir Salkovic

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Not too bad, although I should confess I am not a fan of the horror genre. The story pulled me in and held my interest until it turned weird at the end.

I would suggest dialing back the adjectives and making the descriptive passages as spare as possible.

Finally, the Bulwer-Lytton opening paragraph might bring smiles to some (it was a dark and stormy night...).

http://www.aphelion-webzine.com/shorts/2023/05/TheFixer.html
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