Well, the nasty parole officer made 'it' longer... er, never mind. :PFor me this was nearly a perfect short. it had several of the themes i enjoy, like dystopia and NWO-desperation, even a touch of Twilight Zone-esque irony with the forty year rehab. I take it the forty years were in the convicts' heads, right? not real time.
the scene with the blonde parole officer was especially well done and mammarable, i mean memorable. good one. and Jameson's feelings towards his mom and sarge rang true to me.
Daniel also kept to two cherished hallmarks i hold dear: not giving it all away by spoling the broth with too much background info/descriptive content, and the F word. gotta have that F word somewhere in there.
if anything, this was one of the few occassions where i wished the author would make it longer.
Lee
Robert M.