At first I agreed with the idea that Lincoln and Molly could have just as well lived under a bridge or in a cardboard box, but now I disagree.<br><br>There's something to the idea that things are that bad all over and not just that these two are down on their luck. Even setting the time back to the Depression wouldn't have given as deep a sense of despair or loneliness as there is in a post-apocalyptic world. There may not be any green hills to build their dream house on, and grass may not even grow anymore. Two homeless people endlessly waiting for Godot under the bridge doesn't equal up.<br><br>I thought there was good writing professionalism here. Everything was, for the most part, easy to understand. No grammatical, glaring punctuation errors, or any such ilk.<br><br>Setting: I thought that Limboland could have used some more world building. All I got out of it was that things were bad, and they found a spot for themselves in the terminal. I myself have only been in airport terminals, (I was a country boy) so I didn't have a good picture of what it looked like (just what I've seen in TV and movies). Their little hut was good, and I could picture that just fine.<br><br>I also thought the pair were good, sympathetic characters who developed well. They stayed in their predicament and chose to pray as a way to resolve their problems, and it paid off for them.<br><br>As far as plot, I thought the part until the first break with Jason Mohs, was entirely unneeded. This story could have started just fine, "On a wickedly cold night in the dead of winter, Lincoln Hanks and Molly Furth..." <br><br>Furthermore, I think the intro confused things. There was no "astonishing celestial event that had covered half the globe" the day before. The text said it was a single, narrow shaft of light, and that can't cover half a globe.<br><br>The question of who or what sent the icicles was left hanging, but that was probably to make us do some soul searching.<br><br>All the dividers and point of view breaks at the conclusion suggested that this story didn't know how to end. My suggestion would be to stop at the "Or so some might say." The rest really wasn't needed for the plot.<br><br>I think dialog was handled well. Their speech was consistent with their characters; they sounded like an old, loving couple.<br><br>So, all in all, a good read.<br><br>Nate
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