The Changeling by K. A. Masters

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Megawatts
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The Changeling by K. A. Masters

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Short one but interesting and rather captivating. I believe this might be a scene from a novel in the works, but I’m not sure.

Very good writing but the storytelling a little short.

One criticism is sensory input. If the merman’s tail was seared then possibly a slight reek would permeate the air. Other parts of the story might also be improved with some sensory input. A little sensory goes a long way, but like all other techniques it must be used judiciously.

I liked the twist on the oak tree!!


Nice little one! :wink:
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