Seems Fair to Me

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Megawatts
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Seems Fair to Me

Post by Megawatts »

I couldn’t concentrate on this story. Maybe too much narrations or little action.

From what I did read, the basic writing seemed good and sound, but the explaining about Mike and his life became very bland---- impossible to hold my interest and I had to force myself to keep reading.

Sorry, but I can’t really say I like this one, even with a interesting ending.

More action, more showing, and more varying would go far to improve this one.

I must give credit for the language use, that is always a plus for me. And the correct word choices were also noted. The mechanic in this story are sound, the description good and like I said before it was easy to follow.
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