Posted: January 16, 2010, 12:07:46 PM
A little better attention to language would make this story much better.
English must be a second language to the author, and he/she is in the process of learning its application to story telling. Grammar is one point the must be studied.
The authors at Aphelion who speak and write English as a second language
are held in my highest esteem.
I think this story shows an author who is trying to master English in all its
uses, and in my opinon he will succeed as a very good story-teller.
Nice Job!!
English must be a second language to the author, and he/she is in the process of learning its application to story telling. Grammar is one point the must be studied.
The authors at Aphelion who speak and write English as a second language
are held in my highest esteem.
I think this story shows an author who is trying to master English in all its
uses, and in my opinon he will succeed as a very good story-teller.
Nice Job!!