The intro worked for it did get my attention, and I didn’t have a problem with the dialogue and the show/tell balanced out and the action Okay.
But the story didn’t hold my attention much. The content too reminiscent of the old monster in the closet. But it didn’t scare me.
To sum it up, all the needed mechanical elements of a good story are present in this one, yet I
couldn’t get into the story.
I have no problem with the imagination, words used or style, yet that story itself for some reason didn’t work at all for me, and I can’t pin-point what turned me off about it!!
Good writing, but I didn’t get it.
