Posted: March 16, 2010, 09:41:43 AM
The intro worked, it edges into the story drawing the reader with it. However, the atmospheric effect of the intro vanished, and we are left with a very strong and determined girl. I pity the dud that tries to rape this one in a dark alley in New York City!
I agree with Jamie on this story. Igral is too shallow. She should be multi- dimensional, and a tad more description would have helped.
It’s interesting that Jamie caught “loosed the arrow’’ and not “fired the arrow.” I would have stumbled over that expression and probably came to the conclusion that it was colloquial to the language of the story.
The story is dynamic with just the right amount of breaks to catch one’s breath.
I’m really not into pulp-fiction or sword and sorcery stories much, but I am trying to read more of them.
This one held my interest.
I agree with Jamie on this story. Igral is too shallow. She should be multi- dimensional, and a tad more description would have helped.
It’s interesting that Jamie caught “loosed the arrow’’ and not “fired the arrow.” I would have stumbled over that expression and probably came to the conclusion that it was colloquial to the language of the story.
The story is dynamic with just the right amount of breaks to catch one’s breath.
I’m really not into pulp-fiction or sword and sorcery stories much, but I am trying to read more of them.
This one held my interest.