Aphelion

Well, come on, I'm waiting . . .

Love the first-person stories at times. This one was Okay.

Tie a string around your finger to remember! Just had to get that one in.

The intro worked for it did get my attention. Lisa must be an easy target,
one that serial-killers would go after, for she admits she moved up
the food chain leaving behind the ‘prey animal’ or perfect victim as she thought
of herself.

I’m not sure if the bike possessed some power over the owner or not, but
the interior thought of Lisa does suggest it. And it was a red bike, the color often associated with demons and
such.

Stealing memories would be a good way to get pin numbers and code words, and
learn where someone else’s valuable are hidden. Paul was a master at that, with only
a look he could open up Lisa’s mind and let all her memories drain out and into his mind.

A nice ending; Paul ready got what he deserved helped by Lisa’s friend Mary.


I didn’t understand how the looks worked in robbing a mind, and how Lisa managed
to acquire that ability, but I always like the bad guy getting his, and Paul finally got his!!


good story

Mmm . . . the bike was just a prop . . . still, I'm always interested in seeing how other people interpret story elements. Glad you liked it.

I've entertained the notion of turning this into a series . . . you can get the notion that Mary is a Dangerous Person, and the two of them could go off on adventures. I never did anything with it yet, though.

I didn’t understand how the looks worked in robbing a mind, and how Lisa managed
to acquire that ability

The bigger question is, how did Paul learn this trick . . . then you've got to wonder who else might be at large with the ability . . .