by their thought processes.
This story showed how high tech can sometimes go down a path that it was never intended to
follow. The world of cyberspace and its horizons and universe is immeasurably unknown to us yet. We’ve still just a canoe on a sandy beach before a never-ending expanding ocean. I personally believe that traveling to the stars will become possible through cyberspace, and eventually we as humans in the distance future will cultivate this new dimension and live in it.
A little more showing over telling would have gone a long way in this one. The balance between
show and tell wasn’t bad, but showing when possible is better than telling.
And remember character development. Always strive to get the characters to come alive. In a short story this can be hard, and the characters in this one did have dimension. Morphy, in my opinion, should have more since he as the main one.
All in all, not a bad story, and it did have all the elements needed for good story telling. Maybe
a better balance, and some more sensory input, but the author has a good handle on story telling and I hope he continues here a Aphelion.
I liked it very much. Would be interested in reading other comment!
