Hell Hound by Brian Lo Rocco

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Lester Curtis
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I reread this one a little while ago . . . confusing punctuation errors, as bottomdweller pointed out, but generally, the dialog and characterization are quite good.
The part that bothers me is the ending . . . something happened, but the reader is left wondering just what that something was. A little mystery is okay, but I thought that ending was just a little too vague. It hints that the main character sold the "fish," while some of it seems to hint that his buddy killed it, or was going to (he wanted to, after all). And what happened to the buddy, anyway? Dead, or just sold down the river? Fish food, maybe?
No need to spell out all the details, but just a tiny bit more clarity would help.
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