Freedom! by Ché Frances Monro

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Lester Curtis
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Freedom! by Ché Frances Monro

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This wasn't too bad, but the characterization needs work; characters seem thin, and the dialog is a little flat and unnatural. Plot and setting are pretty good, though.
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Oh, and welcome to the forum! I hope you'll join the little core of active participants we have here; we always need more commentary!
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