The Body Surfer by Edward Ahern

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The Body Surfer by Edward Ahern

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I didn't really care for this story . . . it's too -- thick. It reads like stream-of-consciousness narrative (which I suppose most of it is) and a very little of that goes a very long way. I did understand what was going on by the end of it, but that didn't help it much. Too hard slogging through the incomprehensible on the way. I'd suggest changing the viewpoint more, to give the reader a break. That, or make the incomprehensible parts a little less so.
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