- Lester Curtis
- Long Fiction Editor
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- Joined: January 11, 2010, 12:03:56 AM
- Location: by the time you read this, I'll be somewhere else
Then, by the time something did finally happen, it didn't make sense. That annoyed me, and I was already annoyed by the pointless detail of the first half of it.
The rest of it, clear to the end, continued to not make sense.
Well, okay . . . it seems that every person in the bar went to their own personal hell. Only the narrator survived. When I got to THE END, all I could think was that I'd just wasted my time.
Maybe this will creep out some of the rest of you, but for me, it failed.