Delightful!
Realistic dialog, believable characters, all very seamless, nothing out of place.
Her bio says she's been 'having her way with words' . . . and judging from this example, the words must have all had a good time. I know I did.
Thank you, Rachel!
The Troll and the Maiden by Rachel Eliason
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Re: The Troll and the Maiden by Rachel Eliason
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?
Re: The Troll and the Maiden by Rachel Eliason
I like how the intro captured one’s attention, and I liked how the story developed from that intro.
I found the writing very good with clear sentences, and with the correct amount of sentence lengths that varied.
The dialogue sounded real, and the characters and their interactions with each other also sounded real.
One thing I noticed: Street gangs do not wear cowboy boots. It is too hard to run with cowboy boots on. Street gangs wear Nikes or some other brand of running shoe.
It was a charming read with good story telling techniques, and for the most part I enjoyed it.
I’m not into trolls or high fantasy or dark fantasy, etc. I still love the old mad scientist in the basement type story, but I did enjoy this read.
a good one!
I found the writing very good with clear sentences, and with the correct amount of sentence lengths that varied.
The dialogue sounded real, and the characters and their interactions with each other also sounded real.
One thing I noticed: Street gangs do not wear cowboy boots. It is too hard to run with cowboy boots on. Street gangs wear Nikes or some other brand of running shoe.
It was a charming read with good story telling techniques, and for the most part I enjoyed it.
I’m not into trolls or high fantasy or dark fantasy, etc. I still love the old mad scientist in the basement type story, but I did enjoy this read.
a good one!
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